Comments on: Club Necropolis http://www.dracotorre.com/blog/2010/06/club-necropolis/ Wed, 14 Sep 2011 14:45:00 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.3.1 By: PJ Kaiser http://www.dracotorre.com/blog/2010/06/club-necropolis/comment-page-1/#comment-575 PJ Kaiser Tue, 29 Jun 2010 04:52:50 +0000 http://www.dracotorre.com/blog/?p=1089#comment-575 Very nice read, David - this is a bit of a departure for you. I love the language and the imagery. Although i was creeped out i was also intrigued - i guess that's a good combination ;-) Very nice read, David – this is a bit of a departure for you. I love the language and the imagery. Although i was creeped out i was also intrigued – i guess that's a good combination ;-)

]]> By: Gpching http://www.dracotorre.com/blog/2010/06/club-necropolis/comment-page-1/#comment-574 Gpching Mon, 28 Jun 2010 07:01:42 +0000 http://www.dracotorre.com/blog/?p=1089#comment-574 The scene you painted was quite vivid. Loved the last sentence! The scene you painted was quite vivid. Loved the last sentence!

]]> By: Melissa L. Webb http://www.dracotorre.com/blog/2010/06/club-necropolis/comment-page-1/#comment-573 Melissa L. Webb Sun, 27 Jun 2010 06:55:56 +0000 http://www.dracotorre.com/blog/?p=1089#comment-573 I love this. Great story. I felt I was right there, entranced, like Mike. I love this. Great story. I felt I was right there, entranced, like Mike.

]]> By: David G Shrock http://www.dracotorre.com/blog/2010/06/club-necropolis/comment-page-1/#comment-572 David G Shrock Sat, 26 Jun 2010 23:00:58 +0000 http://www.dracotorre.com/blog/?p=1089#comment-572 Thanks for the feedback on "Club Necropolis." I decided to push the storytelling through imagery into the weird. As Shannon pointed out about the ending, the story doesn't define or try to explain everything. Sometimes it works for flash, sometimes it doesn't. I like to leave some details for the reader's imagination.<br><br>I wrote this story on Thursday right before posting breaking my primary rule. I like to set aside a story and read it with fresh eyes weeks or months later. I took a risk. Sometimes it's good to shake things up and see what happens.<br><br>Thanks to the regular readers, and welcome newcomers. Thanks for the feedback on “Club Necropolis.” I decided to push the storytelling through imagery into the weird. As Shannon pointed out about the ending, the story doesn't define or try to explain everything. Sometimes it works for flash, sometimes it doesn't. I like to leave some details for the reader's imagination.

I wrote this story on Thursday right before posting breaking my primary rule. I like to set aside a story and read it with fresh eyes weeks or months later. I took a risk. Sometimes it's good to shake things up and see what happens.

Thanks to the regular readers, and welcome newcomers.

]]> By: Gracie http://www.dracotorre.com/blog/2010/06/club-necropolis/comment-page-1/#comment-571 Gracie Sat, 26 Jun 2010 18:20:27 +0000 http://www.dracotorre.com/blog/?p=1089#comment-571 Luscious description here. The pacing is also superb. Loved it. Luscious description here. The pacing is also superb. Loved it.

]]> By: shannonesposito http://www.dracotorre.com/blog/2010/06/club-necropolis/comment-page-1/#comment-570 shannonesposito Sat, 26 Jun 2010 15:56:50 +0000 http://www.dracotorre.com/blog/?p=1089#comment-570 I like the fact that it's the building that's alive, I could picture it breathing, the lights and music swelling it in and out. I was a bit confused by the ending (was he the only one dead? or was everyone dead?) but that really didn't take away from my enjoyment of the read as a whole. I like the fact that it's the building that's alive, I could picture it breathing, the lights and music swelling it in and out. I was a bit confused by the ending (was he the only one dead? or was everyone dead?) but that really didn't take away from my enjoyment of the read as a whole.

]]> By: Laura Eno http://www.dracotorre.com/blog/2010/06/club-necropolis/comment-page-1/#comment-569 Laura Eno Sat, 26 Jun 2010 15:02:57 +0000 http://www.dracotorre.com/blog/?p=1089#comment-569 Great imagery to this! Great imagery to this!

]]> By: Brainhaze http://www.dracotorre.com/blog/2010/06/club-necropolis/comment-page-1/#comment-568 Brainhaze Sat, 26 Jun 2010 14:35:30 +0000 http://www.dracotorre.com/blog/?p=1089#comment-568 Great read - made me feel I was really there. Good use of description in first paragraph Great read – made me feel I was really there. Good use of description in first paragraph

]]> By: Tony Noland http://www.dracotorre.com/blog/2010/06/club-necropolis/comment-page-1/#comment-567 Tony Noland Sat, 26 Jun 2010 14:32:16 +0000 http://www.dracotorre.com/blog/?p=1089#comment-567 I loved the phrase, "The club takes a breath." You conveyed the atmosphere perfectly. I loved the phrase, “The club takes a breath.” You conveyed the atmosphere perfectly.

]]> By: Icy Sedgwick http://www.dracotorre.com/blog/2010/06/club-necropolis/comment-page-1/#comment-807 Icy Sedgwick Sat, 26 Jun 2010 13:40:00 +0000 http://www.dracotorre.com/blog/?p=1089#comment-807 Oh I do like this! Very well written, good pacing, excellent description. Oh I do like this! Very well written, good pacing, excellent description.

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