Comments on: It’s Saturn http://www.dracotorre.com/blog/2010/05/its-saturn-2/ Wed, 14 Sep 2011 14:45:00 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.3.1 By: PJ Kaiser http://www.dracotorre.com/blog/2010/05/its-saturn-2/comment-page-1/#comment-546 PJ Kaiser Sun, 30 May 2010 01:32:06 +0000 http://www.dracotorre.com/blog/?p=972#comment-546 David - nice story. I like this as a change of pace - you should definitely write more using astronomy as a backdrop :-) my only critique, a small one, is the repetition of the phrase "small bites" David – nice story. I like this as a change of pace – you should definitely write more using astronomy as a backdrop :-) my only critique, a small one, is the repetition of the phrase “small bites”

]]> By: Cecilia Dominic http://www.dracotorre.com/blog/2010/05/its-saturn-2/comment-page-1/#comment-545 Cecilia Dominic Sat, 29 May 2010 00:15:13 +0000 http://www.dracotorre.com/blog/?p=972#comment-545 Love it how you compare knowledge to eating something really good and worthy of being savored. Very well-written and thoughtful.<br><br>CD Love it how you compare knowledge to eating something really good and worthy of being savored. Very well-written and thoughtful.

CD

]]> By: J. M. Strother http://www.dracotorre.com/blog/2010/05/its-saturn-2/comment-page-1/#comment-542 J. M. Strother Mon, 24 May 2010 16:46:55 +0000 http://www.dracotorre.com/blog/?p=972#comment-542 Nice. I liked this a lot. I particularly enjoyed the ending scene, where he is set up in the park and lets passersby have a look. Brings back fond memories of the group we stumbled upon out in Balboa Park in San Diego a couple of years ago. There were a bunch of people with with telescopes set up. I'm pretty sure when looking through one of them the guy said, "It's Saturn." Quite a connection for me. :)<br><br>Also, I like that this story did not depend on a "twist". Nothing wrong with twists, but they really are not required for a piece of flash fiction to work. A good story is a good story. Period.<br>~jon Nice. I liked this a lot. I particularly enjoyed the ending scene, where he is set up in the park and lets passersby have a look. Brings back fond memories of the group we stumbled upon out in Balboa Park in San Diego a couple of years ago. There were a bunch of people with with telescopes set up. I'm pretty sure when looking through one of them the guy said, “It's Saturn.” Quite a connection for me. :)

Also, I like that this story did not depend on a “twist”. Nothing wrong with twists, but they really are not required for a piece of flash fiction to work. A good story is a good story. Period.
~jon

]]> By: Laura Eno http://www.dracotorre.com/blog/2010/05/its-saturn-2/comment-page-1/#comment-540 Laura Eno Sun, 23 May 2010 21:32:26 +0000 http://www.dracotorre.com/blog/?p=972#comment-540 Great story! All knowledge should be acquired a bite at a time. In some the thirst will grow while in others it won't. Great story! All knowledge should be acquired a bite at a time. In some the thirst will grow while in others it won't.

]]> By: David G Shrock http://www.dracotorre.com/blog/2010/05/its-saturn-2/comment-page-1/#comment-539 David G Shrock Sun, 23 May 2010 19:51:37 +0000 http://www.dracotorre.com/blog/?p=972#comment-539 I've been meaning to write some astronomy stories since it's a subject I'm intimately familiar with. Astronomy does sneak into many of my stories, though. May your astronomy studies inspire new ideas. I've been meaning to write some astronomy stories since it's a subject I'm intimately familiar with. Astronomy does sneak into many of my stories, though. May your astronomy studies inspire new ideas.

]]> By: David G Shrock http://www.dracotorre.com/blog/2010/05/its-saturn-2/comment-page-1/#comment-538 David G Shrock Sun, 23 May 2010 19:38:57 +0000 http://www.dracotorre.com/blog/?p=972#comment-538 Thanks. I updated the post by striking "my" leaving the evidence. I rewrote this from first person and made a few other changes. The original is my first post on this blog: <a href="http://www.dracotorre.com/blog/2009/01/its-saturn/" rel="nofollow">http://www.dracotorre.com/blog/2009/01/its-saturn/</a><br><br>Astrophysics is my lifelong interest. I used my telescope experiences to describe the views. The schoolyard was a childhood thought-experiment. Thanks. I updated the post by striking “my” leaving the evidence. I rewrote this from first person and made a few other changes. The original is my first post on this blog: http://www.dracotorre.com/blog/2009/01/its-saturn/

Astrophysics is my lifelong interest. I used my telescope experiences to describe the views. The schoolyard was a childhood thought-experiment.

]]> By: Gracie http://www.dracotorre.com/blog/2010/05/its-saturn-2/comment-page-1/#comment-537 Gracie Sun, 23 May 2010 18:51:14 +0000 http://www.dracotorre.com/blog/?p=972#comment-537 Beautiful story of wonder guiding learning here. Oh, and good overview of relativity, too.<br><br>Who doesn't love discovering the planets and the universe? Loved this tale. Beautiful story of wonder guiding learning here. Oh, and good overview of relativity, too.

Who doesn't love discovering the planets and the universe? Loved this tale.

]]> By: Mark Kerstetter http://www.dracotorre.com/blog/2010/05/its-saturn-2/comment-page-1/#comment-536 Mark Kerstetter Sun, 23 May 2010 17:27:45 +0000 http://www.dracotorre.com/blog/?p=972#comment-536 You wrote: "Problems twirled through Bobby’s head as he worked them out on my own." - "My own", I'm guessing that, in a sense, that's not really a typo. <br><br>This sentence is great: "Bobby questioned everything, taking small bites." Little brother outgrows big brother in knowledge. I liked how his mind grew in the schoolyard. You wrote: “Problems twirled through Bobby’s head as he worked them out on my own.” – “My own”, I'm guessing that, in a sense, that's not really a typo.

This sentence is great: “Bobby questioned everything, taking small bites.” Little brother outgrows big brother in knowledge. I liked how his mind grew in the schoolyard.

]]> By: Sam http://www.dracotorre.com/blog/2010/05/its-saturn-2/comment-page-1/#comment-535 Sam Sun, 23 May 2010 12:07:27 +0000 http://www.dracotorre.com/blog/?p=972#comment-535 Beautifully told, inspirational tale. Perfect for my Sunday morning reading. Beautifully told, inspirational tale. Perfect for my Sunday morning reading.

]]> By: Jen B http://www.dracotorre.com/blog/2010/05/its-saturn-2/comment-page-1/#comment-533 Jen B Fri, 21 May 2010 19:23:07 +0000 http://www.dracotorre.com/blog/?p=972#comment-533 I remember that moment in my life, when the world opened up, and the universe, too! Beautifully told. I remember that moment in my life, when the world opened up, and the universe, too! Beautifully told.

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