The Only Color

a flash story by David G Shrock

Listen to me tell this story: The Only Color MP3

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I accept the uniform, folded neat upon my arms. The soldier tells me blue is my color. Or is it gray? Another war, another battle—it is always the same—another uniform, nothing ever changes. A warrior only knows one color.

Blue or gray, I don my uniform holding me hot and tight. I stand in line with the others, mercenaries carrying scars of battle upon their faces. Some pale, some dark, the warriors hold two traits in common, their color and death in their eyes.

The mercenaries march, boots crushing the ground. The slinking centipede cuts through the army into the front line. Musket in left hand, sword in my right, I stand gazing over rolling green. A mercenary tells us to remember our color. Remember, the man beside me says tugging at his uniform.

Darkness arrives with the thunder of boots. I hold no argument, no ill between warriors. This is our way. The one beside me speaks again. He wishes me luck, find death at last. I thank him and shake my head. Another field, nothing ever changes. Perhaps my time passed me long ago. I wish him a good death and to remember our color.

Cannon fire announces the battle. Blue meets gray. Cries of war twist into howls of dread. I dance to the music of anguish, the beat of torment. I attack blue. Or is it gray? Dropping the musket, I carry my sword, cutting my way up the hill.

The soldiers are farmers and masons, not warriors. Blue and gray are their colors before the reaping. Some turn away in fear, others stand frozen clenching weapons. I clear first the ones with strength in their eyes. Weapons falling, death calling, a warrior only knows one color.

Blue or gray I forget, but their faces burn into memory. Color flees their cheeks, light departs their eyes. They shed crimson tears upon my dress. Even the mercenaries cry for me. I envy them, their freedom.

On the hilltop I stand alone gazing down over the field. Blue or gray matter no more. All of the fallen wear the same color—my color—flowing down the hill. Death and carrion are my companions.

Red is my color, the only color I know.

~Draco Torre

  • http://www.wordwebbing.com/ netta

    Excellent piece. I'm not sure the last line is necessary, but other than that I love it. Every word counts, and you made them count.

  • http://www.marisabirns.com/ Marisa Birns

    I read this and went back to hear you read the story. Both times awed by the poetic prose and beat to this.

    You have a very nice voice, too!

  • http://mazzz-in-leeds.com/ mazz in Leeds

    I’ll second Netta – the last line is redundant (no pun intended!)nnYou do the shorter piece very well!

  • http://thebokchoy.wordpress.com/ Jared Branch

    Wow that was something else. It really captures the absurdity of war.

  • chance1234

    Nice melodic feel to it

    Good stuff

  • shannonesposito

    This really underlines the futility of war for me. Blue, grey? What does it matter which color someone is wearing, which belief they hold, which piece of dirt they call home? Red is the final color for all of us. Striking piece.

  • http://twitter.com/GPChing GP Ching

    Love the new website. I listened to the audio. I have to disagree with some of the other comments, I think the last line works and pulls it all together. I also think it so represents the civil war period, brother against brother, obligation driving action rather than real belief. Excellent writing and relevant.

  • annetylerlord

    David, this is an excellent, succinct piece. I was in the military and almost had to go to war during the gulf war. I feel the emotion and futility of the fighting. You captured it beautifully and sadly. I think the last line was crucial! Great story and I love the new website!

  • http://estrella05azul.wordpress.com/ Estrella Azul

    This is the shortest piece I read from you, really beautiful and an interesting concept, David!

    PS: nice new blog design if I didn't mention it :)

  • http://lauraeno.blogspot.com/ Laura Eno

    A chilling, brutal, accurate portrayal of war. Well done. I loved the last line!

  • http://ejkwritingspot.blogspot.com/ Eric J. Krause

    Excellent story. Really shows the horrors of war.

  • http://linda-leftbrainwrite.blogspot.com/ Linda

    Great stuff David. Very moving and powerful. I think made more powerful if you chop the last 3 paragraphs. Peace, Linda

  • http://theblockhouse.wordpress.com/ Lou

    This is poignant, and does a fine job of illustrating the absurdity of war.

  • http://muskokariver.blogspot.com/ Cathy Olliffe

    Hi David: Loved your story… read it out loud to my son and he liked it, too. Well written, thought-provoking. Interesting how you used the concept of colour to show that futileness of war. I liked the last line, by the way (although you may have an extra 'the' methinks… but who cares! If we get paid by the word, I say throw in a bunch!) Good stuff, David. My favourite of yours so far.

  • http://dijeratic.wordpress.com/ DJ Young

    This amazing economy is what gets me here – you use it to terrific effect, building up a sense of dread, repetitions of color, to where the colors change, at last.

  • http://www.dracotorre.com/blog/ David G Shrock

    Yes, the last line is redundant, a chorus to the other redundancies.

    This is my first #FridayFlash under 500 word count at 372 words. And my first try out recording my voice.

    Thanks for the comments. Very kind.

  • http://twitter.com/CascadeLily Lily Mulholland

    And death still eludes him. War owes no favours to anyone. Very good short and it fairly ripped along at a cracking pace, despite its dreamlike quality.

  • http://michelledevans.blogspot.com/ michelle

    lovely prose – great to read
    Thanks for a great Fridayflahs

  • http://www.danpowellficiton.com/ danpowell

    Rhythmic feel to this helps convey the ebb and flow of the action. I’d cut the last two lines as ‘All of the fallen wear the same coloru2014my coloru2014flowing down the hill’ is such a powerful image to close on. :)

  • http://skycycler.com/ Skycycler

    Yes! Wonderfully succinct polemic against war here, David. Very effective colourful prose. Bravo.

  • http://windspirit-girl.livejournal.com/ Melissa

    I think I have to disagree about the last line as well. The two sides of violence–it reduces everything to the same and yet has that sharp edge we can never forget. Not human beings, but violence and death draw the boundaries of identity–give identity in fact. Red, besides being the color of blood, is a color that will stand out in a landscape, distinguish itself above others. So, both things need to be underscored in my opinion.

    Great flash, David. Wonderful writing, as always. Among other lines, I loved: “The slinking centipede cuts through the army into the front line.” Great visual.

  • http://www.dracotorre.com/blog/ David G Shrock

    I agree with Dan, that's a powerful image to end on, but for a different story.

    Lily points out the part about the character (Draco Torre) unable to find death and is the only survivor. Melissa points out the final line is about more than just blood.

  • http://twitter.com/ChrisChartrand Chris Chartrand

    Great piece, I wouldn't change a thing.

  • http://miscellaneousyammering.blogspot.com/2010/02/good-clean-fun-flash-fiction.html karen from mentor

    I often cut an author's last line thinking that's it's overkill, but this piece absolutely needs that last beat. This was wonderfully layered. Well done.

    Karen :0)

    possible suggestions?
    their color and [the] death in their eyes
    He wishes me luck,[to] find death at last

  • http://d-paulangel.blogspot.com/ D. Paul Angel

    An intense, powerful story. It gave me chills, thinking of him going endlessly from war to war. Truly appropriate ending.