Comments on: Dunston Monster: Monster Savior

By: mazz in Leeds

mazz in Leeds — Fri, 12 Feb 2010 11:25:05 +0000

“Each breath felt like needles” – fantastic line, as were some others describing cold, and coming in from the cold.
This is wrought with tension between Tabitha and Sebastian.

Falling behind on one's fridayflash reading is good when one gets to read a few of these in one go!

By: Deanna Schrayer

Deanna Schrayer — Thu, 11 Feb 2010 18:11:59 +0000

I'm with Mark about usually not remembering characters well enough to follow a series in increments, simply because I read so many different flash pieces eac week. Dunston Monster, however, is a great exception to that – you've built these charcters so well that I'd be hard pressed to forget them or the stories. I believe one big advantage to posting each segment as a flash is that, as the writer, you Must be able to make each piece stand alone, and you do that very well David. Love how you revealed Sebastian's vulnerable side.
I look forward to next (or I guess I should say this) week – I've gotten behind a bit.

By: David G Shrock

David G Shrock — Thu, 11 Feb 2010 04:45:35 +0000

Thanks, Cathy and Cecilia. Never too late. Hope you enjoy the ending.

By: Cecilia Dominic

Cecilia Dominic — Wed, 10 Feb 2010 22:49:43 +0000

I came to the series late, but I'm really enjoying it and love how each part stands alone as its own nugget of tension.

By: Cathy Olliffe

Cathy Olliffe — Mon, 08 Feb 2010 20:25:58 +0000

Oooo, violence and blood!
Looking forward to it!
Your story, by the by, is really good.
Schoolteachers, eh? They look so darned innocent…

By: David G Shrock

David G Shrock — Mon, 08 Feb 2010 00:20:28 +0000

I will reconsider serials in general. Uncertain if it's for me. Thanks for the input.

By: markkerstetter

markkerstetter — Sun, 07 Feb 2010 20:06:22 +0000

A note about serial fiction. I shy away from reading it, mostly because I can't trust myself to keep coming back. I wouldn't want to confuse the writer by being enthusiastic at first, then becoming (to the writer) mysteriously silent.

If it's hard to see the overall picture in the segments, then I'm going to lose interest, even if I like the writing. I'd rather have the whole thing in front of me. But with Dunston Monster I have a grip on the plot and an interest in the characters. You've managed the segments so that they are self-contained, remind the reader of the past, and propel forward, just like good old fashioned cliff-hangers. It kinda helps that your writing is superb.

By: markkerstetter

markkerstetter — Sun, 07 Feb 2010 19:48:11 +0000

I'm primed for the violence and blood man! Your writing here and in last week's cliff-hanger is just like that: pumped and on-edge. I admire the palpable style. One doesn't read, one feels. I like the way power is exchanged between Sebastian and Tabitha: first she has the advantage, then he. And yeah, the schoolteacher comment – both of them – right on!

By: Lou

Lou — Sun, 07 Feb 2010 03:24:11 +0000

I'm a little nervous about the upcoming blood, but I enjoyed this installment and I will be back. Nice work.

By: shannonesposito

shannonesposito — Sat, 06 Feb 2010 18:06:19 +0000

Serializing novels like this is a new concept for me. I've read that some people have had success with giving the story in small increments but also have a link to the full story if you want to pay to read the whole thing right then. Not much, like $5. Not a bad idea. I don't have the best of memories, so it's hard for me to remember characters from week to week. Not sure this is a problem for others.

That said, I really like this story. High stakes, learning to trust, interspecies relationships