Dunston Monster: Demon Hunter

a flash series part 8 of 8 by David G Shrock

See Dunston Monster Contents for series information or back to Part 7.

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The breeze chilled Sebastian. He tried to pull his gaze away. Gunpowder consumed his nostrils, and a ringing swarmed inside his ear. His gaze traced the tufts of fabric. He stared at the stump of a neck sliced clean, blood pooling around shoulders. A crimson trail fled out the door, splotches on the snow.

“All wrong from the start,” said Sebastian. Sweat dripped down his brow. The floor tilting towards him then away. From the shotgun welcome at Dunston, hurrying off in search of Tabitha meeting Father Young, the riddle, Tabitha teasing his gun away. Even the weather had been against him, beyond the turning point forcing him here, Roan, the killer.

“I should have stayed with her.” Glancing back he spotted the innkeeper crouching at the corner of the bar. “I should have asked more questions at Dunston. More insistent. More protective of my gun.”

Running fingers back through his hair, Sebastian gazed down at the headless body. He recalled the hellfire. “But you were right, Tabitha.” He pictured her sharp teeth. Tears flooded his eyes blurring vision. “They would have executed you without a trail.”

“But if I had done better,” said Sebastian. He remembered the moonlight kissing her smiling face. “Same result, only sooner.”

With the killer on the loose, there was still a chance for justice. Leaning down over the body, he snatched the shotgun. “Where’s my hat?” He felt naked without his hat.

Creeping around the bar, Balmer held it up, shaking.

Sebastian snatched the hat, smashed it on his head, and tugged the brim down. His boots thumped across the floor and over the body. Pausing at the door, he glanced back at Balmer. “Fetch the lawman.”

The nearly pristine snow beneath the hanging lanterns made the trail easy to follow. The blood droplets made it obvious. Turning a corner, boots skidding over slick cobblestone, Sebastian found a narrow street between stone buildings. Light spilled a few meters into the street before being swallowed by darkness. At the other end of the chasm, the red horizon outlined the forest, dark spindly fingers reaching for the sky. Before the trees, a white mist, nearly glowing beneath the moonlight, grasped at the air.

Sebastian inspected the shotgun, a double barrel with a single shot remaining. Entering the shadows, Sebastian held his breath. Snow crunched beneath boots. The cold gripped him, icy fingers digging into his back. He searched the white ground. Every shadowy divot leaped out at him, his mind turning them into footprints and blood drops.

Then he saw him, a silhouette of a slender figure surrounded by burning red around the flat brim of the hat, white mist surrounding torso and legs. At his side, something hung from his hand, long threads reaching to the bulbous mass at the man’s knee; the killer held the head by the hair.

Sebastian stepped, one foot in front of the other, and raised the shotgun taking aim. His heart thundered in his chest. Beyond range, he continued. “Conrad,” he said, “show me your hands!”

Conrad released the hair. The head fell and thumped in the snow.

Red pressed through spindly trees turning the mist into a dance of writhing white tendrils, and painted the far end of the street.

Shotgun level, finger over trigger, Sebastian crept placing one foot before the other, heart slamming his chest. Keeping his eye on the shadowy figure, he heard the crunching and clacking of his boots, a morning bird singing to the coming sun, heartbeat in his ears. Ten paces from the corner, he stopped.

A bird tweeted. Another answered. Distant boots clomped over cobblestone.

Conrad stood motionless. Behind him, the horizon brightened.

“Your hands, Conrad!” Sebastian squinted into the light.

Flutter of shadow, and the shotgun slipped from his grasp. Conrad stood before him his parted duster revealing weapons hanging from belt. At the end of an extended arm, slender fingers held the barrel of a revolver, wood handle outward. It appeared very similar to the one lost to the river.

Heart slowing, Sebastian stared at his father’s other revolver held out to him. Confused, he peered at the face. Blood dripped from thin lips onto the pale chin. High cheekbones, slender nose, the face nearly appeared feminine. The narrow eyes, confident cold blue steel gaze pierced into him. A shiver scrambled down his backside. He felt small, naked. He tried to hold the gaze, but his eyes deceived him and he peered down at the revolver in the hand.

“Your father,” said Conrad, whispering through clenched teeth. “A great warrior.”

Sebastian gulped down saliva, and licked his lips. He felt like a child, small and helpless.

“His,” said Conrad, “death.” He peered down at the revolver. “A good death.”

Reaching out, Sebastian grabbed the revolver by the handle and held it against his chest. Peering down at the offering, he understood the words. The two warriors had fought with honor. Conrad respected Rhemus the Giant.

His father felt closer.

Sebastian looked up finding the street empty. Sunlight struck his face, and he held up his hand blocking the light. Glancing back, he searched the empty street. Before him the empty meadow cradled pristine snow. Somehow he knew, no matter how improbable, the creature had departed with the night.

Tabitha’s head rested in the snow, dark hairs fanned over cheek. Dropping to a knee, Sebastian brushed the hair aside revealing the wound. Instead of a clean cut, he found a gash, torn flesh hanging from the back, and within, broken skull fragments slick with blood. It appeared as though Conrad had chewed his way into the back of the skull.

Hearing footsteps, a cane tapping cobblestone, he twirled around finding Father Young.

“No. I’m not following you, boy.” Father Young pointed his cane towards the building on the left. “My church.”

“That’s how you knew how to find Conrad.” Sebastian slipped his father’s revolver—his revolver—into his holster. “What is he? A vampire?” It sounded too much like folklore, but he had no other explanation.

“Nonsense, boy.” Father Young rubbed his balding head and peered down at the head. “Something old. Older than I even.”

Sebastian peered at the dark glasses picturing the strange gold orbs within. Father Young was something not quite human, and he wanted to know more. “Father, I’ve seen evil.”

Father Young peered up and wrinkled his nose. Sunlight glimmered on the dark lenses. “Conrad?”

“Ignorance,” said Sebastian. “We all choose our path, Father Young, and sometimes that path offers very few forks.” He shook his head at the limited choices along the way. “How can I help anyone? With all these secrets! I must learn about your people. Tabitha’s people.”

“You truly are your father’s son.” Father Young shook his head. “A hunter.”

“A defender.” Sebastian held his head high. He felt refreshed knowing his path. “I must return to university.”

Father Young nodded. “I’ll message Father Gustav.”

“But first I must visit Dunston. Let them know their monster is gone.”

“And Conrad?”

“Didn’t you notice? He’s a demon hunter.” Sebastian scowled. “My father’s final assignment. You sent my father after Conrad, didn’t you?”

Father Young cringed.

“I’d sleep with a gold eye open if I were you, Father Young.” Sebastian grinned. “Conrad is still out there.”

Picking up the Dunston Monster’s head, Sebastian held it to his chest. He brushed the dark hair aside finding the serpentine teeth within gaping jaw. Vision blurred. He felt tears streaming down his cheeks. Recalling their talk in the woods, sitting in the trees, his tears became a shower.

“No,” said Sebastian. “You’re not evil, Tabitha.” He took a step, wobbling. He pictured the moonlight splashing off her cheeks, her smile, and peered down at her dead eyes. The hellfire was gone. Clenching teeth, he marched into town.

“No more evil than the rest of us monsters.”

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Thanks for reading “Dunston Monster.” Comments or questions? Please, let me know what you think. Your opinion is valuable and appreciated.

Shadow Memories

“Duston Montster” appears in Shadow Memories available on Smashwords and Amazon.

If you enjoyed this story, you may also enjoy my novel, Raven Memory, a modern science-fantasy in the same world.

Sebastian is part of Draco Torre’s world. See more of him in future short stories and in my second novel.

-David G Shrock 2010

“Dunston Monster” copyright © 2010 David G Shrock

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20 Responses to Dunston Monster: Demon Hunter

  1. Skycycler says:

    You do dialogue so well, David. This just rips along. Poor Tabitha! Loved this: “…He remembered the moonlight kissing her smiling face.” That's a treasured memory. Wonderful story – I'm going to download the epub version and read it all through again.
    Simon

  2. Whoah! Not the ending I was expecting (I didn't have a particular ending in mind, that is, but this was unexpected nonetheless, if that makes sense)

    Great last line, very _human_ somehow.
    I hope you're going to expand on these “demon” folk in another work, they are most fascinating

  3. Big thanks to weekly readers. A week is a long time between 5-minute episodes. I never expected many to follow along. I thank you. Now readers may try the story at their own pace.

    Thanks, Simon. I always think my dialogue isn't as strong, and I keep working at at. Kind of you to mention reading again with the ePub, and may reading at your own pace be a different one.

    Maria, we'll explore these folk more later.

  4. I'll sleep with a gold eye open too, after reading your stories. Exciting, interesting, imaginative and well written. A feather in your cap!

  5. shannonesposito says:

    I like that you made us feel sympathy for Tabitha and the fact that he wanted justice for her death. Good and evil aren't black and white and this ending underlines that in bold. Really enjoyed these characters, I hope this does well for you!

  6. Melissa says:

    Wow–not the ending I'd expected either, but I like it. I'm incredibly sad about Tabitha. :( Loved the writing here–its flow lent itself to Sebastian's emotional (and perhaps–a bit–moral) disorientation. Naming the killer “Joseph Conrad” is a nice touch. I really enjoyed this series and hope you consider doing another. Your writing is always tops and always captivating–I'd like to read a series of novels by you one day, too. :) (I don't read much fantasy, but I'd read this.)

  7. Melissa says:

    Wow–not the ending I'd expected either, but I like it. I'm incredibly sad about Tabitha. :( Loved the writing here–its flow lent itself to Sebastian's emotional (and perhaps–a bit–moral) disorientation. Naming the killer “Joseph Conrad” is a nice touch. I really enjoyed this series and hope you consider doing another. Your writing is always tops and always captivating–I'd like to read a series of novels by you one day, too. :) (I don't read much fantasy, but I'd read this.)

  8. Marisa Birns says:

    And so it ends. A wonderful story, a truly wonderful story. It has the perfect ending, though I did not imagine it when I first started reading.

    Love the cover design with your drawing of Tabitha.

  9. Laura Eno says:

    Loved it! Great story and yet there are so many ways it could be expanded too. Your last line says it all.

  10. GP Ching says:

    Awww, somehow I thought he might end up with Tabitha but I like the way you ended it. I grew attached to Sebastian's character over these weeks, especially through your dialogue. He teeters on the verge of full maturity in this story and this last part you see his personal growth so clearly. Wonderful story, well done.

  11. Thanks very much, Melissa. My fantasy is less fantastical and more about life I like to think. My first novel runs similar themes, but leans towards science. I'll make sure you know when the novel is ready. :)

  12. Welcome Cathy and Alex, glad you enjoyed the story.

    Poor Tabitha, she couldn't go back and she had her heart set on revenge. Sorry GP and Melissa.

    Maria, Alex and Laura, nice to hear last line works.

    Marisa, I made the cover quickly, but seems to have turned out well enough. Thanks.

  13. Linda says:

    Ah the grand finale… well worth the wait. You've set yourself up nicely for sequel.

    But the head?! Ugh! Perfectly gruesome. And you nailed the ending with that last line – bravo! Made the story universal. Peace, Linda

  14. Excellent ending to an excellent series.

  15. ganymeder says:

    Great ending! I like how he acknowledges that actions are what makes a monster. Wonderfully written.

  16. Thanks Linda, Eric, and ganymeder. Glad you enjoyed the ending. Yes, I know… the head… A sequel? How about a novel?

  17. annetylerlord says:

    Ah, what an excellent ending to your series! I really enjoyed the mystery and this world you created.

    I agree, poor Tabitha, but it looks like the evil will continue.

    I really like the coverart – I remember your great drawing. This is the perfect way to honor Tabitha!

  18. markkerstetter says:

    A minor criticism: This sentence doesn't feel right to me:

    “In his hand at his side, something hung from his hand, long threads reaching to the bulbous mass at the man’s knee; the killer held the head by the hair.”

    -the repetition of the word “hand” doesn't feel right to me.

    I liked your conclusion too, but I'm not as surprised as some of the others. I've come to expect these kinds of nuances and ambiguities from you – they're one of the things I like most about your work, and I think they lend themselves well to many possible elaborations and developments.

  19. Excellent catch. The sentence should start “At his side,” removing the first instance of “hand.”

    The ending: Besides a strong pace into the final episode, we also know little about the Killer/Conrad. We get a revelation here setting up for future stories. It's also different reading straight through. Details go missing between weeks. My test reader wasn't surprised, either.

    Three test readers for my novel pointed out that I “don't write fluff” and what at first seems like “fluff” turns out to be important details. This is one reason I will not write another serial. My stories are best enjoyed at the reader's pace.

    Thanks for your input.

  20. Thanks, Anne. I'm glad you find the ending agreeable and like the cover. We will return to Sebastian's world again.

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