Comments on: Dunston Monster: Tabitha

By: David G Shrock

David G Shrock — Thu, 14 Jan 2010 02:59:16 +0000

Very kind comments.
Further adventures? Well Eric, we'll see how this series looks at the end. Maybe we'll revisit Sebastian again in the future.

By: Eric J. Krause

Eric J. Krause — Wed, 13 Jan 2010 19:58:17 +0000

I love the description in this (both parts 1 & 2). It's an interesting story, and I'm enjoying it. Looking forward to the coming weeks and further adventures of Sebastian.

By: Laurita

Laurita — Wed, 13 Jan 2010 12:55:57 +0000

Excellent visuals here and lots of suspense. I can't wait to find out more.

By: David G Shrock

David G Shrock — Tue, 12 Jan 2010 03:09:41 +0000

Thanks, Deanna. There's a forest nearby that's always damp. I borrowed from my extensive experience of it licking me.

Yes, since characters call him “giant” several times, we don't really need any extras. A good learning experience.

By: David G Shrock

David G Shrock — Tue, 12 Jan 2010 02:57:22 +0000

Thanks, Mark. I like layers. Regular flash restricts exploration of layers where a series allows more freedom. And Tabitha. In review, I'm liking her introduction more and more.

By: Deanna Schrayer

Deanna Schrayer — Mon, 11 Jan 2010 23:46:14 +0000

Great description David! I actually got a chill I felt so damp. I agree with Anton re: the number of references to “giant” – you do such a good job at showing us how large he is I don't think it's necessary to use the word so often. I'm loving this world you're creating and look forward to more.

By: markkerstetter

markkerstetter — Mon, 11 Jan 2010 20:06:33 +0000

Excellent descriptions, especially of the cabin. Tabitha seems formidable, the reader wants to know more.

Levels (or layers) in both society and in the characters are suggested with minimal means. I like how it seems Sebastian is learning about all of this and about himself as he follows the path.

By: David G Shrock

David G Shrock — Sun, 10 Jan 2010 02:40:44 +0000

I bet you knew Father Young would be back. I hope he brought cookies. No? Oh well.

By: David G Shrock

David G Shrock — Sun, 10 Jan 2010 02:29:46 +0000

After the wet description, if that metaphor doesn't impress, I don't know what will. Thanks. Very kind comments.

By: Laura Eno

Laura Eno — Sun, 10 Jan 2010 01:54:43 +0000

Father Young is back…
Loved the setting, the description of the walk and the fog.