Dunston Monster: Tabitha

a flash series part 2 of 8 by David G Shrock

See Dunston Monster Contents for series information or start at Part 1.

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Fog drenched the air moistening evergreen trunks, leafless bushes, and flowers. Sebastian marveled at the late autumn flowers blooming on the mountainside above Dunston. They seemed to relish the cold moist air. Everything was wet: his hat, his coat, his trousers. Wetness even crawled his skin beneath his clothing. The forest licked him constantly.

After the shotgun welcoming, Sebastian had only asked a few questions, enough to get him started. Thomas had assured him that Myrtle Ridge was the most likely location to find the Dunston Monster. Nobody hunted here. None of the Dunston residents ever came here. According to Thomas, the ridge was cursed and the best place to start searching for their missing Tabitha.

“Two dead and one missing,” said Sebastian, going over his mental notes. An apparent miscount stopped him in his tracks. The sheriff was also missing. The city of Jefferson was the county seat. He supposed Thomas had only included Dunston residents, and other matters likely occupied Sheriff Haas. Sebastian kept the missing count at one and prayed the dead count remained the same.

photo by Staci

The game trail veered up over slick rocks into a tangle of branches clawing at Sebastian. Roots reached out snagging his boots.

Peering up the incline, he spotted something blue on the dirt wall. He dug his boot into the dirt, reached up, and grasped a root. Pulling himself up, he scaled higher. He reached, snatched the blue cloth tearing it from the roots. Splotches of dirt covered the wet rag that was once a long skirt.

The thought of the missing woman shot strength into him, and he scrambled up the hillside. He grasped at roots and rocks nearly running on all fours. Lungs burned, and he coughed a cloud of vapor.

At the top, Sebastian found a pale rocky ledge overlooking the clouds. Sunlight felt wonderful on his face. He stood peering down at the mountainside disappearing into the sea of fog, Myrtle Ridge an island. Dunston was somewhere down there buried within the fog. Beyond, another mountain broke the clouds.

A trail led from the ledge climbing higher. Clouds clawed at the side of Myrtle Ridge consuming trees. Sebastian shivered and pulled his coat closed. The monster appeared at night, Thomas had made clear with slow words. And with the fog, according to the boy. The ridge was quiet as a grave.

Marching into the woods he followed the worn trail up a gentle slope into the fog. His boots crunched needles and knocked on rocks. Nestled against a cluster of trees, covered in moss, a wood cabin sat at the end of the path. Before the open doorway, a young woman wearing a dark fur coat stood watching him.

“I see they sent a giant,” said the woman, scowling.

Sebastian stood silent. Surprise took his words. He was not expecting a quiet welcome on a cursed ridge, perhaps a grumpy man wielding a weapon, but not a young woman.

The woman folded her arms. “Are you dumb, giant?”

“Rhemus.” He coughed. “My name is Sebastian Rhemus.”

“Kettle’s on.” She disappeared inside leaving the door open.

It almost felt like a trap. Opening his coat, Sebastian uncovered the revolver—his father’s gun—resting in the holster at his hip. He removed his hat and ducked inside. He stood, head bumping ceiling, and hunched over. A single bed in disarray stood on the right, a square table consumed the left side of the cabin, and behind it a small stove burned wood. Rot ate at the log walls, webs clung to the corners, and the table leaned against the wall on two broken legs. The lamp on the table released a pungent oil, clouds of decay clung to the glass, the flame cast a sickly green.

The young woman removed a copper kettle from the stove and poured steaming water into two gleaming white cups. A flowery scent pushed aside the rot. Pressing down on the nearest chair, Sebastian tested its strength. The seat groaned but felt firm. The woman sat on the other chair.

“Thank you,” said Sebastian. Slowly, he sat down. The chair complained, creaking. He held out the blue skirt. “Tabitha?”

Nodding, she took the skirt and tossed it over her shoulder onto the bed next to a pile of clothes including undergarments. Watching the table, she sipped her tea.

“Thomas,” said Sebastian. He held the teacup warming his hands. “He tells me there’s a monster.”

Frowning, Tabitha set her cup down. Her eyes caught the light, glimmering a fractal-scape of various browns from golden to near black. “If you’re looking for monsters, I suggest you look in Dunston.”

“How do you mean?”

“The monster Thomas speaks of is not a monster at all.”

“I figured as much.”

Tabitha frowned. “You’re new at this, aren’t you?”

“Pardon?”

“Are all giants this stupid?”

Feeling like he missed something, Sebastian peered around the cabin, abandoned until recent activity. Her wet clothes discarded on the bed, Tabitha wore an old fur coat belonging to the previous occupant. The open door gave him a view of the fog drenched woods. No monsters.

“You’ll not find my brother’s killer here,” said Tabitha.

Sebastian saw her loss on her long face understanding her disposition at last, and he felt her sorrow. His mother’s funeral still gripped his thoughts. He felt his own face sag.

Tabitha sipped her tea while she stared at the table. Or through the table, her briliant brown eyes appeared unfocused. “Outside,” she said. “Father Young has been expecting you.”

Sebastian stared at Tabitha, uncertain if he heard the words correctly. He recalled the night Father Young had disappeared, the revelation of those strange gold eyes.

Lurching from the chair Sebastian stood, head banged a cross beam, and he stooped out the doorway throwing his hat on his head. He searched the tree consuming fog.

A shadow in the mist, the form took shape. First the balding head appeared and then the torso wrapped in black. Father Young peered through his round dark spectacles. A sneer cut his face.

Sebastian stood, gawking at the man in disbelief.

“Greetings, Sebastian,” said Father Young. “Shouldn’t you be at university?”

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Continue to Part 3.

  • http://www.marisabirns.com/ Marisa Birns

    Description is just marvelous!

    Really, really like the writing here…

    Can't wait to read what Sebastian answers Father Young in next installment.

  • http://mazzz-in-leeds.com/ mazzz in Leeds

    Ooooh – good Part 2, the intrigue continues. Tabitha and Father Young – what could be happening?
    Great visuals on his walk along the “cursed ridge”

  • http://windspirit-girl.livejournal.com/ Melissa

    I'm hooked. I hadn't read the first installment and with the last sentence here I went back–HAVING to read it NOW. I can't wait for the next installment. Love the character, love the world you're building here.

  • http://windspirit-girl.livejournal.com/ Melissa

    I'm hooked. I hadn't read the first installment and with the last sentence here I went back–HAVING to read it NOW. I can't wait for the next installment. Love the character, love the world you're building here.

  • http://magenta.monsters.wigglypets.co.uk/ Sarah

    Oooo the suspense builds!

    I can't wait

    Thanks for sharing

    Saffy

  • http://linda-leftbrainwrite.blogspot.com/ Linda

    Wonderful imagery here (and love that foggy photo). And what will young Sebastian say to Father Young? Peace, Linda

  • http://skycycler.com/ Skycycler

    The mystery deepens… great setting, I can feel the cold and damp in my bones. And how desperately cool is Tabitha when confronted with a giant? I too am looking forward to the next instalment.

  • http://dogsdespair.blogspot.com/ Anton Gully

    This is an engaging and well told tale BUT… I'm starting to find all the giant references a bit much. I'm not buying it. Nine times out of ten when you meet someone really tall, you're not going to say anything. And when you do say something, it'll be an off-hand remark.

    Unless you're building up the “giant” comments for some particular reason, I'd dial it back.

    You'll get the same impression of his height from sly glances and awkward spaces.

    Unless I have totally misread this series so far and he is an ACTUAL giant.

  • http://www.dracotorre.com/blog/ David G Shrock

    Thanks, Melissa. How does this part read on its own? I think its a nice support for the series, but by itself it might fall a little short.

  • http://www.dracotorre.com/blog/ David G Shrock

    Exactly. Reactions to basketball players tend to be glances, brief comments. Andre the Giant stood only a few inches taller than Shaq O'neal, but was much larger. And in person, reactions to Andre were stronger even with prior media knowledge.

    Another reaction tall and large people get are requests for tasks: reach something high, lift, carry. Sebastian mentions these experiences. He's accustomed to doing these chores.

    Reactions to Sebastian vary.

    Is Tabitha's reaction all that much? She calls him a giant and stupid, but no gawking and no fuss. The town's reaction in the last one was strong, but it was dark, foggy and they were in fear after recent murders.

    In earlier stories from last fall some didn't react at all, his size barely mentioned.

    How big is Sebastian? In Part 1, he mentions they didnt' have a horse big enough for him. Here we see Sebastian fits through a door. In “Warton Haunt” Sebastian offered to lift the back of a wagon. In “A Grave Giant” he knelt and still stood taller than his sister. Given the evidence could put Sebastian about Shaq's height, but larger.

    Then it depends on what you call an “actual” giant. If it's like in the fables where giants are bigger than buildings–no–Dunston gunman probably would have just shot him on sight. If biblical Goliath or Andre, I'd say yes.

    Good calling me out on this. It's a good point: how much is too much?

    What do others think? Too much size references in the first two parts?

  • http://www.dracotorre.com/blog/ David G Shrock

    Thanks, Linda. My sister took the photo, kind enough to allow me to post it here.

  • http://www.dracotorre.com/blog/ David G Shrock

    Thanks, Maria. I almost cut some of the walk, but felt it supported the atmosphere and slows the pace after the first part.

  • http://www.michelledevans.blogspot.com/ michelle

    Hey, wow – this is a good series – will have to remember to come back for more…

  • http://dogsdespair.blogspot.com/ Anton Gully

    After I posted that comment I thought to myself what if everyone in the village is a midget and I'm spoiling a plotline. :)

  • http://www.dracotorre.com/blog/ David G Shrock

    Ha! Without spoiling the plot, I'll say: We'll look at this again in the next part.

  • http://www.dracotorre.com/blog/ David G Shrock

    Thanks for the comments. And Anton's critical eye for an interesting topic. “Giant” is a relative term, and a writer shouldn't overdo a trait unless there's a reason.

  • annetylerlord

    David,

    Wonderful, mysterious world you are creating! I am enjoying this series.

    Ooo, Father Young, can't wait to see what is next with this!

  • http://weezel-whatscaresyou.blogspot.com Louise Dragon

    “The forest licked him constantly.” — This is really good writing! Nice metaphor and it gives the reader a really good impression of a damp forest.
    This is actually taking on a “Gunslinger” quality that makes me want to keep reading. Nicely done!

  • http://weezel-whatscaresyou.blogspot.com Louise Dragon

    “The forest licked him constantly.” — This is a great mataphor and gave me a clearer picture of the dampness of the forest. The story is starting to take on a “Gunslinger” quality that I'm really enjoying. Nice Job!

  • http://lauraeno.blogspot.com/ Laura Eno

    Father Young is back…
    Loved the setting, the description of the walk and the fog.

  • http://www.dracotorre.com/blog/ David G Shrock

    After the wet description, if that metaphor doesn't impress, I don't know what will. Thanks. Very kind comments.

  • http://www.dracotorre.com/blog/ David G Shrock

    I bet you knew Father Young would be back. I hope he brought cookies. No? Oh well.

  • markkerstetter

    Excellent descriptions, especially of the cabin. Tabitha seems formidable, the reader wants to know more.

    Levels (or layers) in both society and in the characters are suggested with minimal means. I like how it seems Sebastian is learning about all of this and about himself as he follows the path.

  • Deanna Schrayer

    Great description David! I actually got a chill I felt so damp. I agree with Anton re: the number of references to “giant” – you do such a good job at showing us how large he is I don't think it's necessary to use the word so often. I'm loving this world you're creating and look forward to more.

  • http://www.dracotorre.com/blog/ David G Shrock

    Thanks, Mark. I like layers. Regular flash restricts exploration of layers where a series allows more freedom. And Tabitha. In review, I'm liking her introduction more and more.