Dunston Monster: Sinners

a flash series part 5 of 8 by David G Shrock

See Dunston Monster Contents for series information or back to Part 4.

Tabitha

Tabitha

Snow blanketed the forest, large flakes flying sideways turned tree trunks white. The storm arrived before the sun trapping the land in twilight. Wind bit Sebastian’s face and threatened to rip his hat from head. With one hand he held his hat while he tucked the other under coat, fingers pressed into armpits for warmth. Every few strides he switched hands.

Tabitha walked behind, the revolver tucked within her folded arms. Frost stuck to her entire right side, hair frozen against her cheek. Under the darkened sky, her eyes held a soft glow. In darkness those orbs simmered like burning coals.

As the narrow road descended, winding through the forest, the roar of a river grew. Rounding a bend, the river came into view splashing over rocks into a pool. Water lapped up onto the end of the road. On the opposite side, the road continued.

Jaw unhinging, Tabitha set her cruel gaze on the river. She shook her head.

The river appeared passable for horses in better weather, but not by foot in the freezing cold. Wind biting his nose, Sebastian searched for shelter. Spotting a group of large trees on the left side of the road near the riverbank, he pointed. Tabitha nodded her agreement, and they bounded into the trees. Finding ground clear of snow beneath a heavy canopy, they squatted against the tree trunks protected from the wind. Sebastian took up two trunks. Wind squeezed between them finding his back. Tabitha snuggled between two roots of the largest tree.

Tabitha laughed. “No bridge.”

“We shouldn’t have come.” Cupping hands over face, Sebastian breathed warmth into his palms. He thought about returning, had insisted on it several times, but Tabitha had urged him on at gunpoint. Now Dunston was too long a walk in the storm.

Tabitha’s smile faded. “I told you. I can’t go back.”

Thomas had made it clear the conditions for a warm welcome: find the monster, return with Tabitha. He only had a name, Joseph Conrad, a killer, his father’s killer according to Father Young. Sebastian was hardly ranger material, held hostage by a woman. He felt small.

Looking over, Sebastian saw something that froze his blood. The cold could play with the mind, but he felt certain he saw true. He gazed at her open mouth gaping at the river. It was plain as the frost sticking to her dark hair. Her two top canines, slender and pointed, met the bottom pair, serpentine fangs. Realizing he stared, he pulled his gaze up. The embers burned like hellfire within her irises.

He recalled the warning. The monster appeared at night.

Two dead and one missing Thomas had told him. He had assumed Tabitha was the missing one.

Tabitha ran her tongue over pointed teeth.

“Are you?” It felt wrong, but he wanted to know about her. He wanted her to tell him that she was a person like him.

“A demon?” Tabitha giggled, sounding like a young girl imitating the devil. “Church boy.” She set the revolver on her lap, rubbed her hands together, and shivered maintaining a coy smile.

Sebastian shook his head. Her smile relieved him, but he frowned feeling guilty about asking. In all the stories elders told children, the monsters were easy to identify. Big teeth, strange eyes, or excessive size marked the monsters. Gazing at Tabitha, he wondered if there was some truth to those stories.

Taking a deep breath, Sebastian summoned courage. “Are any others in Dunston like you?”

Her smile faded. “Besides my brother? No.”

Sebastian nodded at the clue, the first victim was normal.

Tabitha flashed an evil grin. “Frightened?”

He nodded.

“You ought to be.” She held up the revolver. “I have the gun.” Lowering the weapon to the ground, finger on the handle, she hugged her knees. Her tongue licked over a fang. “Many of us don’t bite.”

Listening, Sebastian watched her eyes. He stared at those luminescent orbs feeling like a child gazing upon strangeness, and he realized how little he knew about the world.

“After the first.” Tabitha rested her cheek on her knee. “That’s when the monster talk started. Nobody suspected the two of us. Not at first. And when I saw you approaching the cabin, I thought you were him. Rhemus the Giant come to take me away.”

Breaking his gaze, Sebastian hung his head.

“What was he like? Your father.”

He felt like he knew little about his father, less since the funeral. “As a boy I imagined he caught train robbers, brought killers to justice. A hero.” Cupping hands, he blew into his palms. “Apparently he hunted people like you.”

“Demon hunter.” Tabitha frowned.

“My apologies.” Sebastian gazed at Tabitha no longer seeing a young woman. He had assumed she was the missing one, but he realized Thomas had demanded her return. Perhaps Thomas had only suspected Tabitha.

Tucking hands under his coat, Sebastian buried his fingers within his armpits. His fingertips prickled with pain. “What are you plans once we reach Roan?”

“Revenge.”

“A sin,” said Sebastian. He chuckled. “That’s what Father Young taught me.”

“We’re all sinners.” Tabitha wrapped her arms around her knees, hugging them, and rocked on her heels. “The killer. Me. Your father. Young. My brother’s bad habit.”

Sebastian raised an eyebrow. There was still one missing: Sheriff Haas.

Tabitha snickered. “And you sitting there picturing my bare breasts.”

Chuckling, Sebastian felt his insides burn, and he coughed sending pain shooting through his chest. The cold attacking the moisture within his clothes could mean death.

Tabitha sat up and fondled the revolver, running her fingers over the barrel. “Does that make us all evil?”

Sebastian shook his head. He had to convince her to turn herself in, confess or testify. She must abandon revenge. Learning more about his father’s death could wait. “Not if we ask for His forgiveness.”

“Look!” Tabitha stood and pointed with the revolver. “A way across the river.”

Leaning over, Sebastian peered beneath the branches spotting a row of rocks extending across the river. They appeared uneven and too far apart for anyone but a man of his size. “It doesn’t look good.”

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Continue to Part 6.

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  • Those eyes are going to haunt me. Particularly her left one (well, the one to our right!). Very expressive, great drawing.

    She's quite a creation (I've moved from the drawing to the writing now!)
    Lovely visuals, as ever.
  • Thanks for the comments.
    GP, the good-evil line is fading. The description of her teeth required close attention.

    CJ, yes the heat vs chill helps this scene smolder.

    Laurita, my pencils seem lonely and very old.

    Estrella, yes, Tabitha is real.
  • You keep me speculating about what takes place next? Your writing is marvelous and the characters are so lively, not to mention the drawing which makes Tabitha additionally real.
  • (failed to mention that in a demon-like way, but she does seem so real to me) :)
  • I like the way you are building these, and love the characters. G. P. picked out my favourite section.

    The drawing is excellent. I suggest you renew your familiarity with the pencil.
  • I enjoyed the descriptions of the cold here - both in the setting and how it's chilling them. Nice contrast against her ember-like eyes and the heat of the situation.
  • I like the way you write, very dream-like. This is the first of the series I can remember reading, but I really enjoyed it and plan to follow along.

    CD
  • Thank you, Cecilia, and welcome.
  • Loved this section-- "He gazed at her open mouth gaping at the river. It was plain as the frost sticking to her dark hair. Her two top canines, slender and pointed, met the bottom pair, serpentine fangs." Your writing is so visual and I like where you are taking this, blurring the line between good and evil.
  • shannonesposito
    Nice job on the drawing, faces are hard and you've done especially well with the shading for the nose. I'm really liking where this story is going, too. I can feel the tension beginning within Sebastian, the truth coming out about his father seems like it's going to change him in big ways. He's going to have to make a stand or at least a big decision soon, isn't he?
  • Thanks, Shannon. Drawing the nose is the most difficult part for me. Lighting is the key.

    Glad to hear the story is going well for you.
  • As you know, I really enjoy this series. I agree with the others about wanting to slow down and take in the details of this scene. Tabitha is very interesting and a great character to be part of this "monster" tale. Your drawing is wonderful, if it has been a decade, you really should do more now!
    Anne Tyler Lord
  • Thanks, Anne. I've been wanting to do more drawing all these years. The world keeps me busy.

    I like Tabitha. Thought she needed a drawing. One day, I'll draw Sebastian.
  • This is my 2nd try at posting a comment - I hope it doesn't post twice.
    This series just gets better and better David. This particular piece feels much more eerie than previous posts, (a good thing). I just love it, and your art is fantastic!
  • Thanks, Deanna. Glad your comment came through, only once this time. I sometimes have trouble with OpenID on some sites, most often Blogspot. Uncertain if that's the issue, but I'll ask around.

    Yes, eerie is good, for me anyway.
  • Another excellent chapter. The stakes keep being raised, and it's making for a wonderful tale. I'm interested in seeing how it all plays out for Sebastian.
  • Great writing details! I feel for both of them and keep wondering what lies ahead. Excellent last line.
  • I can't tell you how much I enjoy reading these. I get further and further caught into the story every time. It's the type of writing you want to sink into, unhurried, with a cup of tea or coffee. Every detail counts, and you don't want to miss the rhythm and sound of the language itself. I was going to ask about the drawing of Tabitha, but I just read that you drew it yourself. Nice! You asked for criticisms--it's not one really. It's just I feel that in #fridayflash mode I'm hurried, rushed. Your posts require me--no, make me desire--to slow down. Which is a good thing. :)
  • Fridayflash offers a nice mix. I find myself speeding through some, enjoying a nice kick, and then slowing down for others. My test readers said the same about my novel, "every detail counts." I hear that often.

    I enjoy tea while reading. Thanks, Melissa.
  • Excellent! I read this twice in one sitting because I loved it so.

    So many wonderful lines. Smiled at the part where Sebastian acknowledges his fear of her demon-ness and Tabitha says he should be afraid of her because, "I have the gun."

    Your drawing of Tabitha is wonderfully rendered. No laughing, chuckling, or "aww that's so cute" needed here. :)

    You draw very well, you write very well. What a rich creative life you lead!
  • Thanks, Marisa. Your comments are always full of kindness.

    My life isn't all that creatively rich, more like brief explosions of creativity. I'd like to draw more. I began my novel 8 years ago.
  • The art is my first pencil drawing in over a decade. Felt strange. I remember how, but tough getting the pencil going again.

    I welcome criticism and personal opinion on this and previous episodes. A few have stated a preference to wait till the end. I sympathize, and will see you Feb 19. Thanks to those reading along each week.
  • ganymeder
    I really enjoy these stories. I actually sympathize with both characters, and your writing is excellent.

    I noticed one small thing that you might want to correct though.
    >Sebastian took up two trunks, wind squeezed between finding his back. <
    Maybe it should be something like:
    Sebastian took up two trunks. The wind squeezed between them, finding his back.

    Great job. I can't wait for more!
  • Thanks! Nice catch. I fixed it.
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