Comments on: Dunston Monster: Riddle on the Ridge

By: David G Shrock

David G Shrock — Mon, 18 Jan 2010 16:49:29 +0000

Thanks, #fridayflash writers.

Tony, Yes, I think Sebastian handled the riddle fairly well.

Carrie and CJ, welcome and thanks. No everyday heroes or villains here. The golden-eyed monk is watching.

How about the non-writers? Don't be shy. Thoughts?

By: CJ Hodges MacFarlane

CJ Hodges MacFarlane — Mon, 18 Jan 2010 16:08:15 +0000

Monsters questing after monsters with the aid of a golden-eyed monk? Interesting … I'll be back for more.

Well-written, too, I should add.

By: Tony Noland

Tony Noland — Mon, 18 Jan 2010 13:57:02 +0000

This was really rich in the atmosphere between the characters. The decryption of the riddle was well done. Nice work.

By: shadowsinstone

shadowsinstone — Mon, 18 Jan 2010 02:39:45 +0000

Very smooth. Nice dialogue.

By: Laura Eno

Laura Eno — Sun, 17 Jan 2010 16:13:39 +0000

I'm enjoying this series, waiting for everything to unfold. Those eyes!

By: Estrella Azul

Estrella Azul — Sun, 17 Jan 2010 14:38:56 +0000

You have such great sense for details, I love your writing and this series especially!

By: David G Shrock

David G Shrock — Sun, 17 Jan 2010 03:59:45 +0000

Mark, two great points. One of the reasons I decided to try a series is to progress an overall story in the way I write best. Another reason is feedback.

We're going at Sebastian's pace. This is his story.

By: markkerstetter

markkerstetter — Sun, 17 Jan 2010 02:25:42 +0000

It's fun to read the episode (one of many things we could call it) along with the comments. eg Marisa: delight = good; I echo Melissa's comment in appreciating the different metaphoric levels of the eyes and how that relates to perception throughout your tales (one of the things I like most about them); and I enjoy taking issue with Anton – linger on that ridge as long as you like, you're very good at creating a mood, and you need space to do it.

By: Linda

Linda — Sat, 16 Jan 2010 22:59:28 +0000

Going good, nice and tense… but I want to meet the giant. Both these characters dark and elusive, slippery even. Looking forward to installment 4… Peace, Linda

By: David G Shrock

David G Shrock — Sat, 16 Jan 2010 21:59:05 +0000

Oh, right. The title does mention a monster, doesn't it?

Plenty of talking on the ridge, but not much action. He did find the girl so soon, though. Coming up: action, emotional junk for the girls, and monster glimpses. I assume you like dark.

Nothing wrong with your comments, Anton. I look forward to your next. Thanks.