Dunston Monster: Riddle on the Ridge

a flash series part 3 of 8 by David G Shrock

See Dunston Monster Contents for series outline or back to Part 2.

Myrtle Ridge

Father Young breathed the mist like a dragon, flaring nostrils shooting streams of white. He wore round dark spectacles like a blind man. Dew glistened on his balding head, smoky tufts of hair sticking out on each side. He held his cane nearly horizontal, one hand near the top and the other gripped the midsection. Quietly he oozed out of the fog.

Gazing at the dark lenses, Sebastian recalled the strange orbs, twin storms of dark bolts cracking golden orbs. They were inhuman eyes, monstrous. Watching Father Young leaving the mist behind, he recalled the words of Thomas. The Dunston Monster arrived with the fog. Father Young had the eyes of a monster, but according to Tabitha the killer fled elsewhere.

“Shouldn’t you be at university?” Father Young stood with his feet apart, hands on the cane as if ready to attack.

“Father Gustav sent me.” Pulling coat open, Sebastian revealed the gun at hip. “My studies are on hold.”

Father Young nodded. “Boy, you and I have an agreement. You tell Gustav you’re not your father’s replacement.”

“Did you have my father murdered?”

“Don’t be absurd, boy.”

Tabitha appeared with a teacup in each hand. She offered a cup to Father Young. Slipping his cane underarm, he smiled and took the cup. Sebastian accepted the other teacup. Stepping to the side, the Dunston woman watched the men drink their tea.

“A giant,” said Father Young, raising his teacup. “To some, an intimidating sight. Others.” He lowered his cup and grinned. “To others merely a big man. A helping hand carrying the heavy load.” He removed his dark glasses.

Sebastian peered at the golden jewels bursting with dark currents radiating from the center. He thought the orbs might appear more natural on a lizard.

Father Young raised his teacup again. “A beast to some and a friend to others.”

Sebastian breathed in the cold air recalling his arrival at Dunston, an isolated little town. They likely had never seen anyone very tall before. On Mary’s insistence, they had allowed him to take the quest, find their missing Tabitha. Thomas had made it clear that only success allowed his welcome. To them, his unusual size made him a monster.

Raising his cup, Sebastian nodded a salute. He realized that of all the people, even his own siblings, Father Young understood him best. “To monsters.”

Father Young drank. Sebastian emptied his cup, the floral tea filling him with warmth.

“I wonder,” said Father Young. His strange eyes made reading difficult, but he appeared to feign curiosity. “Did your father, Rhemus the Giant, hunt monsters so others wouldn’t hunt him?”

His father, taller and nearly brutish in appearance, had earned the title of Giant at a young age. “I’m not my father.”

“No. That is why I offer you another chance. A challenge. Fail and go back to university. Tell Gustav you want to become a scholar or a priest. Something civilized.”

“On my success, I will continue my quest to find the Dunston Monster. And you’ll tell me about my father’s killer. Those are my terms.”

“Agreed.” Father Young tapped his cane twice on the ground. “I have eyes of gold, I’m older than this country, and I’m my mother’s father. What am I?”

Sebastian gazed at the gold eyes, the gray hair, and wondered about Father Young’s age. Being older than a country seemed unlikely, not impossible. A ruse, he considered. Twirling through his head he pictured gold coins, rings, needles with eyelets. Nothing fit.

Thoughts turning back to persons, Sebastian considered Father Young’s grandfather—his mother’s father. A grandfather is a person. A position fits the riddle.

Then Sebastian considered that Father Young’s riddle was meant to be taken literally.

“No monsters here,” said Sebastian.

Father Young grinned.

Glancing between the men, Tabitha appeared confused.

“Your riddle is a message.” Sebastian tried fighting it, but a smile melted onto his face. “You are a priest.”

“That’s it?” Tabitha glared at Father Young. “A priest?”

“That’s the answer to the riddle,” said Sebastian, looking over at Tabitha. “But the message is that he is of high respect within the church. My superior.”

Eyes narrowing, Tabitha studied Sebastian as if seeing him for the first time.

“Maybe the others don’t know about his inhuman eyes, but I suspect a few among the church do including Father Gustav.” Sebastian studied the gold eyes searching for confirmation. The orbs were mirrors. “And my father. He knew. Didn’t he?”

Rhemus the Giant had hunted Father Young’s kind, a revelation by the priest at their last meeting. Sebastian recalled his childhood listening to Father Young’s weekly sermons. Had the priest ever lied? Father Young’s blindness had been an unspoken lie.

Sebastian took a deep breath. “Did you order my father to hunt your own kind?”

“Dear Tabitha knows your father’s killer. Her brother knew him very well.” Father Young’s grin faded. “Please escort the lady back to town.”

Sebastian watched the priest disappear into the fog. “Another time then, Father Young.”

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Continue to Part 4.

  • http://www.dracotorre.com/blog/ David G Shrock

    Father Young last appeared in my first #fridayflash, “Young Secret” when Sebastian received his father's revolver in a box.

    I thank the weekly readers for your comments and criticism, and I welcome those joining this series following the young Sebastian.

  • michaeljsolender

    You still got it going on, building nicely

  • http://www.marisabirns.com/ Marisa Birns

    This continues to captivate, intrigue, delight. Lovely prose, dialogue, scene, setting. I'm so impressed by your work.

  • http://windspirit-girl.livejournal.com/ Melissa

    I've so been looking forward to this next installment. I agree with Marisa. Such great description and dialogue! I love the details such as Father Young's eyes. I like the implications of their being mirrors to how Sebastian and his (deceased) father see, have/had seen, and might see themselves–in their own eyes and in relation to “the other”–Father Young's “kind” but also the other people. Interested in knowing more about what kind of creature Father Young is…

  • annetylerlord

    I am enjoying this series – you have a captivating story going!

    I love the gold eyes!

  • http://www.dracotorre.com/blog/ David G Shrock

    Delight? Thanks, Marisa. Prose, dialogue, scene, setting – check. I'll work at improving, maybe less delightful.

  • http://www.dracotorre.com/blog/ David G Shrock

    Thoughtful comment, Melissa. Yes, one of the layers within this chapter points to the relationships and similarities between these characters. Sebastian is learning.

  • http://www.dracotorre.com/blog/ David G Shrock

    Brief server issues on comment system earlier. I received Kim's comment via tweet. Thanks Kim!

  • http://skycycler.com/ Skycycler

    Still dark, dank and intriguing – and growing more so. I'm enjoying this series. Very effective writing.

  • http://twitter.com/GPChing GP Ching

    I'm new to your blog so I had to go back and read from the beginning. You weave an intriguing tale here. I'm enjoying this world you've built. Looking forward to more.

  • http://www.dracotorre.com/blog/ David G Shrock

    Welcome to my madness… er… blog.

    Thanks. No weaving, really. I record events. This is my first try at a flash series. We'll see how it goes.

  • http://www.dracotorre.com/blog/ David G Shrock

    I hope you like dark…

  • http://ejkwritingspot.blogspot.com/ Eric J. Krause

    This is a great series. I'm really enjoying reading about Sebastian. Looking forward to next week and beyond.

  • ganymeder

    You've created some pretty interesting characters. I love how you go back and forth between them talking about hunting monsters and being monsters. Good story.

  • http://mazzz-in-leeds.com/ mazzz in Leeds

    I'm enjoying this series. When we get to 8 I will go back to the beginning and read it all in one go! The gold eyes and those of the priest's kind – v intriguing!

  • http://www.dracotorre.com/blog/ David G Shrock

    I'm curious to how it reads weekly. I included some overlap and references between parts to aid memory. Not smooth as a single story, but feels like short chapters. Will be interesting to see responses on weekly vs at-once reading.

    Thanks, Maria.

  • http://dogsdespair.blogspot.com/ Anton Gully

    More giant references! ;) Must admit I've been looking forward to this week's contribution.

    It's a taut scene, and I think you've handled it well, BUT it's the third part of an eight part series and not much has really happened yet.

    I noticed this last time as well but I was clearly fixated on height back then. hehe.

    I might just be impatient but I want to get to the Monster. Even just a fleeting glimpse.

    As ever, my comments are my own and almost certainly wrong.

    Looking forward to part four. Your writing style is really easy to take in.

  • http://www.dracotorre.com/blog/ David G Shrock

    Oh, right. The title does mention a monster, doesn't it? :)

    Plenty of talking on the ridge, but not much action. He did find the girl so soon, though. Coming up: action, emotional junk for the girls, and monster glimpses. I assume you like dark.

    Nothing wrong with your comments, Anton. I look forward to your next. Thanks.

  • http://linda-leftbrainwrite.blogspot.com/ Linda

    Going good, nice and tense… but I want to meet the giant. Both these characters dark and elusive, slippery even. Looking forward to installment 4… Peace, Linda

  • markkerstetter

    It's fun to read the episode (one of many things we could call it) along with the comments. eg Marisa: delight = good; I echo Melissa's comment in appreciating the different metaphoric levels of the eyes and how that relates to perception throughout your tales (one of the things I like most about them); and I enjoy taking issue with Anton – linger on that ridge as long as you like, you're very good at creating a mood, and you need space to do it.

  • http://www.dracotorre.com/blog/ David G Shrock

    Mark, two great points. One of the reasons I decided to try a series is to progress an overall story in the way I write best. Another reason is feedback.

    We're going at Sebastian's pace. This is his story.

  • http://estrella05azul.wordpress.com/ Estrella Azul

    You have such great sense for details, I love your writing and this series especially!

  • http://lauraeno.blogspot.com/ Laura Eno

    I'm enjoying this series, waiting for everything to unfold. Those eyes!

  • shadowsinstone

    Very smooth. Nice dialogue.

  • http://twitter.com/TonyNoland Tony Noland

    This was really rich in the atmosphere between the characters. The decryption of the riddle was well done. Nice work.