Comments on: Darkness Was Her Dress

By: Deirdre Murphy

Deirdre Murphy — Thu, 10 Dec 2009 08:54:15 +0000

Nice.

By: J. M. Strother

J. M. Strother — Wed, 09 Dec 2009 23:23:09 +0000

This is a fascinating mythology you've written. It seemed familiar, and I see you mention the other story in the comments, which is what I was recollecting. Intense imagery, and as mentioned above, that one line is a killer:
Darkness was her dress flowing over the land.
Terrific stuff.
~jon

By: David G Shrock

David G Shrock — Wed, 09 Dec 2009 22:18:46 +0000

Thanks, Melissa.

That is quite the compliment. Sad for your computer, but I'm glad you're back and getting caught up, assuming more stories haven't interrupted your day. Stories have a habit of doing that.

Raising questions: it's what I like best about reading. Every story should present questions, sometimes personal ones that differ from other readers.

By: David G Shrock

David G Shrock — Wed, 09 Dec 2009 22:06:38 +0000

Thanks, Kevin. Others have pointed out this line. It describes precisely what I see in few words, and I think best describes Nyx.

By: Melissa

Melissa — Wed, 09 Dec 2009 18:05:54 +0000

Wow, I had meant to take a glance at this and come back to read it later (after I did the work I needed to do for the day–my computer crashed Saturday–I have it now–and I'm behind)–but I had to keep reading. I love the fantasy–and also love how it raised for me questions in general of boundary, borders, meetings…Really enjoyed it.

By: KjM

KjM — Wed, 09 Dec 2009 05:49:35 +0000

“Darkness was her dress flowing over the land.”

I really like the above line. As was mentioned before, the imagery in this piece is very rich and wonderfully dark. Nicely done.

By: trev

trev — Mon, 07 Dec 2009 14:59:50 +0000

I enjoyed the tight prose. Also liked the time frames used. Dusk, dawn – those transitional, in between times are my fave. THey're where the cool stuff happens.

By: mazzz_in_Leeds

mazzz_in_Leeds — Sun, 06 Dec 2009 10:57:55 +0000

Ah, the lovely Nyx again! Love the imagery of Dusk and Dawn, and of Nyx being clad in darkness.
Very good

By: David G Shrock

David G Shrock — Sun, 06 Dec 2009 01:59:25 +0000

Thanks Marisa, Laura, and Kim. I appreciate your kind comments.

By: Laura Eno

Laura Eno — Sat, 05 Dec 2009 19:08:48 +0000

I love fantasy and stories of the night. Dusk and Dawn holding their swords, guarding the borders – fantastic visual.